Проверьте текст на наличие ошибок (только знающие), много . dear jane, thanks a lot for your letter. my birthday was in august. i turned 12 year sold. i had a big birthday party. i invited a lot of friends. on the birthday we played, danced, had fun while my mother was cutting cake. i got a lot of presents includes board games a lot of sweets and other presents. my birthday was very good and had fun. i think that my birthday is one of the best days in a year
Пиши какого числа,а то письмо будет не понятным-это первое.
А так все правильно