Проверьте ! in our country we have got different types of education: primary, secondary and higher education. i have passed these three steps of education. i started my state primary school, when i was seven and went to there until i was ten. then i went to a secondary school and left it when i was seventeen. after finishing the 11th grade, i passed the ege and are then awarded a certificate of complete secondary education (attestat) in july. now i entered the university «ranepa». i’m in my second year at the university so i’m a sophomore. i study full-time and pay for tuition fee. i live in a home because i come from moscow, but some students rented accommodation. after i graduated from university, i get a bachelor's degree. in winter at the end of the term we are going to take exams. after that we are going to have winter holidays.
until I was - until I became лучше
I passed the EGE and are then - лишнее слово
I study full-time and pay for tuition fee - лишний предлог
I live in a home because I come from Moscow - I live at home because I am from Moscow
время тут неуместно
After I graduated from university, I get a Bachelor's degree - When I graduate from the University I will get a Bachelor's degree
After that we are going to have winter holidays. - здесь лучше взять конструкцию будущего времени we will have